NIce poem i loved the transition 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

Excellent!

the concept is great! some lines are deep..
keep it up!

InterestinG tO reaD, excitinG tO seE thE sounD oF youR truE knowledgE, alL iN alL, you'rE a lovelY poeT..... keeP uP youR writinG anD brinG morE excitinG poeM iN futurE... 5/5

The idea or the sound on your expressions seems to be quite charming. tt's always my pleasure to read line by line carefully on all what you try to narrate. itt might take minutes to get its real emotion,. your expressions and its wave is a charismatic one. 'GOOD' Feel better and write more, inform me of any new, and I will take interest deeply without any hesitations dear.

This is an awsom poem :) great work

The depth with this one, is amazing.
I was hesitant on reading it,
simply because I read one of your others..
But, I wont be hesitant any longer.
This poem was done very well, good work.

For a beginner, as you say you are.. You're very good at this.

You had good depth, good image, good form, and good rhyme. The key things I look for. Your metaphor and reasoning was very good. You have a real knack for this. Keep it up.

Ian

Very very nicely done....5/5..xoxo