Why do i feel so broken

It's a good topic, and this poem shows some good basic skills. I think you could become a great poet, but you need a lot of work.

Your wording seems a bit boring to me, not exactly forced, but like you were trying and got the wrong results...

The idea of talking about your friends, the entire topic, its a very intelligent and mature one to cover, so you get points for that. :)

I just don't think your poem is as strong as it could be. I can see places you could brake it, or add in comas, and it'd improve the rhythm a little, and give it a more appealing structure (and thus sound).

Keep writing though, I do think you have the making's of a good poet, and it does seem like a good hobby for you. ^_^

This has all been my opinion, if you disagree with it, it's not my fault. Good luck.

2/5

This poem has a lot of emotion in it and it flows nicely. i like the idea and how you ran with it.

Keep up the good work 5/5

This poem is very touching! great job! 5/5

I really enjoyed your poem.. :)
i gave it a 5/5
please return the favor

EMOTION..I can feel it flowing in this poem

it is well written...please keep writing and I will keep reading 5/5