Very beautiful, you created great imagery and used simple words to describe complex beauty of nature. I like the atmosphere, somehow peaceful.
Well done for first haiku, 5/5 from me

You created wonderful imagery here with so few words. Great job for your first haiku. The piece seems very serene and clam when you read it. 5/5

marcella

Seems great man. the onlything i can see that could have used a better word, to make the last line more crisp, would bto be as breezes collide.

seems fine either way. great write.

(: Tom

This Haiku was well written. You did a really great job for your first one and I like what it was about. Perfectly done! 5/5

~Kristina

A very good first Marc:D

You created beautiful imagery, with simple but effective line's.
I really liked this one:)
keep writting,
5/5 Elly.

A very nice first! Your word usage was ace and you created a lovely scene. Makes me want to step outside. [: The last line was a bit awkward to me -- in my mind it reads better with an 's' on the end of 'collide' ... but otherwise excellent!

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Seeing as this was your first haiku I really did enjoy it. It was quite beautiful and the word choice was elegant and effective. Descriptive and an enjoyable read. Overall this deserves a 5/5 in my opinion. Keep up the great work you should write more of this style as you wrote it well. ~Mel

Beautiful and serene ,you would never know it was your first. wonderful job.

I like the last line the most -Beautiful

I love how you're unique and use such detail in your work

I love haiku's. In such simple lines, a whole story can be told, this is no exception..
Fabulous!
5/5
*Gem*

This haiku was wonderful! So much simplicity and feeling are here! 5/5

Great haiku!
Word choice was beautiful.
Very nice work!
Take care