This is really good
Keep it up 5/5
-Liz

I normally stray very far away from the poets that I see have forms in the title. I don't know why.. but I see poetry as a free expression, and the insistant need to title something based on a rhyme scheme upsets me. I'm not sure why. For some reason.. The following didnt apply for you. Prepare for a chapter.
This poem, is one of my favorites of yours. I've read most, just never commented. You have beautiful imagery in each poem, and this one was as magnificent as any other. You have nice form, nice flow, nice incentive. A good story plot, and a good hand. I do hope you free yourself of writers block so I can read more of this. You are brilliant. Maybe even warm me up to haikus and reverse etherees. ;]

5/5

I liked the ending, I think that it summed up this peice perfectly. Your word choice was amazing, and your flow was flawless. The emotion expressed was deep and true. I loved it all.
Great job!
5/5

Amber...

Ending stanza totally throw me off, it just doesn't fit in the rest of it, specially last line. Rhyming also looks very forced( in the fourth stanza the most) Title is great, my favorite stanza is the first one. First three stanzas are outstanding but the rest two aren't that good. I like the idea for whole poem, it is really unique and emotional.

"Pushing me into the deep end, I forgot to tell you I can't swim" ohh how i friggin loved those lines! they really stood out to me...filled with so much depth and meaning and just beautifully written...as was the whole poem...this my dear is my favourite of your's so far...perfect!

It kinda sacres me how much I can relate to this, so I just had to comment.
I loved the 'You paint the simile on my shocked face' line'.
Again a great poem with good exposed emotions.

Excellent!

Ok, for this one, The first line rhymes so well but not as the same as other lines but its okay, and I notice that the lines were forced. Well I gave 5 for the realism of your piece. Nicely done!

Keep it up!

This poem, i just can't actually and clearly see the picture though i know it's another unique piece (the flow went off a bit). about the last stanza i can't find any problem in it 'coz you manage to end it somehow smoothly (or perhaps, not so smooth 'coz of the flow i'm telling you earlier) aside from the fact that i'm aniticipating for more powerful and graceful ending. the ending made me feel like you suddenly dropped the words so easily just to say you have wrapped it all up and end it that way (just let your feeling do the work and not merely with your mind). hope that works and sorry if i offended you.. =)

I like the context and the ideas. Not that this detracts from the poem, but i'm not sure about the flow and the rhyming. It's still a great piece though.
DnB