by Laura Sep 17, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
Only son to extremely proud parents |
by Angie
RIP Michael |
by Nix
I don't like first two stanzas but rest of this poem is great. You expressed strong emotions superbly and topic is very sad. I enjoyed in it, you just described every feeling excellently. Well done, this piece truly deserves 5/5(but maybe you should change first two stanzas they aren't good like the rest of this poem) |
I like it a lot, whole poem is greatly written, except the fact that you added the dates in the piece which didn't leave very good impression for me. Anyway, poem is very touching, filled with emotions. You did great job with rhyming, too, and the flow of the whole piece is excellent. Choice of words is also great in whole poem. |