It's interesting, original and filled with emotions. It has great rhythm and it is deep, it sounds very personal which is touching and it adds great effect to the whole piece.
The only thing that ruined the flow of tis piece was the repetition of the word pain in the fourth stanza.
Other than that, this is a great read.
Keep up!

One could really feel deep emotion in this poem and I could not help but feel the pain. Well written I like the style

Your poets heart unfurls itself willingly and lends its words to us to float and drift among our own words. Good work, I enjoyed your poem and look forward to more.