Thats pretty good. hey how about In Bloddy Tears? idk i'm not good at titles. ut it was still good though

I really like it, I normally cant get into the flow of rhyming poem ( the irnoy makes me chuckle) But really... that poem got across to me... Youve got a great talent going... Keep it up. <3 tc xx

Holy Moley!...that was really good and really had so much powerful emotion...and the description put a vivid image in my head, excellent write!

Brooke<3

This is an amazing poem
i really liked it.
&& i get this. itz the same with mehh. :[[
but great job. 5/5. :]]

So dark and twisted, so full of raw emotion, beautifully written. love it!