I sit alone here,
knowing you wont be around any time soon.
I'm so frustrated cause i do love you,
but its like you don't understand the pain i have inside.
don't you get it, right now i want to die?
I'm scared, do you care?
I'm crying trying to hold on for you.
I'm sick of dealing with this on my own
can't you help me or are you picking your "bro's"?
You say you love me but why don't you seem to care?
You know i am crying,
but all I'm doing now is counting the steps your taking away.
i have this knife in my hand,
ready to take the next step.
why wont you save me baby?
do i even matter?
the only thing i have been able to do to continue holding on,
is think of you my love, and let the tears fall.
"your taking away." << you're.
Capitalize your I's, dear.
Other than those two things it's a decent poem. I didn't like it as well "relapse again" but it was good.
The flow was off here and there, and the emotion wasn't as.. intense? I'm not sure how to put it.