by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex Sep 19, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
The name was too long for the box, but the title is: |
Wow this poem was pretty good.. not your best but good in a way. I agree that it sounds more like a story than a poem but some of the lines in here are beautiful. I think if you were to make it in shorter stanzas it would look more like the poems we are used to reading and it would be easier to stay in the moment |
by Robert
This was a good poem it was abit too long but the description was as always very well done good job plot121. Loved the structure as well. |
The stars will answer if only you stop breathing - they don't like your oxygen. |
I like the way that you put speech in this poem. I really can see a tale emerge from this and because of the length you allowed yourself to go into detail with this poem. nice write :D xxx alex xxx |
I felt this was a heartfelt write, however; I thought it was more of a story than a poem. The structure was more like paragraphs than stanzas in my opinion, but the flow was good. Overall good write, but not great. |