Internal Flame

by Lonely Little Dreamer   Sep 20, 2007


Stinging pressure strikes the heart,
Permanently imprinting, a flame does start.
Fiery tendrils begin to sway,
Along to the drumming that starts to play.
Wisps dance to passion's growing beat,
Heating skin and burning deep.
Searing kisses caress the soul,
Feeding the fire thats out of control.
No cool breeze from words of ice,
Could ever extinguish a flame of this height.
Year after year, the fire may fade,
But the coals will forever remain.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    I absolutley love the flow, it had me mesmerized from the beginning, flow and the grammer is perfect, again 5/5!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    This poem has excellent imagery mixed with incredibly expressed emotions. I enjoyed in this piece, it is short but very powerful. Whole poem is filed with so many feelings. Well done!

  • 17 years ago

    by DeathlyAmore

    Amazing description! It was short, it was passionate, it was spot on. You make all my poems seem like nothing. HONEST.

    "Year after year, the fire may fade,
    But the coals will forever remain. "

    Amazing line for interpretation! Symbolizing that love just as it could fade can not be forgotten! The scars, the memories, are present in the burned coals. You described the flames symbolizing emotions that your heart and insides feel! A parallel hidden in the poem! I LOVE IT.

    Magnificent! Outstanding! I am utterly... envious of your poem.

    [Voted 5]

    _Sam

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie

    O_o.
    Wow.
    I'm speechless.
    That has got to be one of the best love poems that I have ever read. Everything about it was just perfect. :)

    "Stinging pressure strikes the heart,
    Permanently imprinting, a flame does start."

    ^ Good gracious... I'm envious. Magnificent job. :) Overall: 5.5

    --- Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Now this, This was such a beautiful read. The flow was spot on and din't falter at all and the emotions portrayed were deep which really hit at my heart. Such a capturing piece you have written here which was powerful and strong. You ended this nicely. Great work. Keep it up. 5/5 ~Mel

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