Excellent!

honestly the flow is not that good, but i like your concept and usage of the words

keep it up!

This was quite the great poem, I'm going to keep an eye out for future works of yours. The structure to me was a little different proberly your own personal style. The meaning portrayed behind it though was deep really capturing and honestly did take my breathe away. Keep on writing from what I see here you have some talent. Well done. ~Mel

I really enjoyed this piece. I think it's exquisitely penned. There's so much depth. The rhythm and style was unique - and fit well with this poem. This is definitely one of my favorites. Wonderful job!

Write On!
Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Hey! Wow well done, it was really unique! Great job, your words are really powerful! Keep up the amazing work! 5/5