Crystallised Mirror Reflection {Contest}

by GretaInsideOut   Sep 20, 2007


Watching the people wander,
With times I can't remember,
I find it hard to feel,
Places my wounds won't heal.

This mirror reflection that I see,
Fills a haunted room.
This mirror reflection that is me,
Holds together clouds of gloom.

This heart has lost all grace,
A mind that's out of place,
Green eyes that see through vanity,
My thoughts of cheap insanity.

Crystallized, so I can't see,
The mess I have become to be,
My mind, it is so broken,
My mouth I shall not open.

For the silence speaks a million words,
And I'll continue to walk backwards,
Back to a place I dare to look,
A place where a stranger took,
Away a feeling deep within me,
Vulnerability, I pay the fee.

So here in this mirror view,
To see a stranger, me, I am askew.
I'll hate his memory that lingers here,
But mirror, you don't forget the fear.

This mirror reflection that I see,
Fills a haunted room.
This mirror reflection that is me,
Holds together clouds of gloom.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Poseur

    I especially liked the line--for the silence speaks a million words, and i'll continue to walk backwards--thats awsome.

    but i agree with dark spirit. the rhyming was kinda forced.

    but other than the rhyming--very powerful. niice work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    Excellent poem
    You had a brilliant rhyming flow
    5/5

    =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    To be honest, I don't like rhyming in this one too much... That is just my opinion but it seems little forced, anyway you described emotions nicely and whole piece is filled with many feelings.

  • 17 years ago

    by Boy

    This heart has lost all grace,
    A mind that's out of place,
    Green eyes that see through vanity,
    My thoughts of cheap insanity.

    awwwwwwww. it was such a sad poem. and brought a tear from my eyes. what a lovely work
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Greta, how sad am i am that you have left PFP.
    But you entered this in the september contest and came third.
    I thought it was sad, well written with emotion, you did a lovely job.
    Love always, Tara-Kay
    x

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