I don't like rhyming in this one too much, and I personally don't like word-hate- and I also think that you leaved bad impression with repetition of that word. All in all it isn't bad poem, that is just my opinion but honestly I didn't enjoy in this one too much. I think that you could wrote it with some metaphors and create more powerful atmosphere.

Ending is truly effective btw, I truly like last two lines of this poem, they are very deep.