I liked this, it has a certain story telling about it, and poems having messages and telling stories is the point isn't it? excellent

Thanks so much ^_^ yeah i agree with you. I was kinda inspired by beuwolf or however you spell it =)

Its okay you could do better though i think...i don't mean to sound so what you call it like a teacher...but very good...keep it up :)

Yeah i wrote this a year ago, but i dont want to revise it because you kinda have to do it in a certain amount of time or the idea dims you know?