Lose my breath

That beautiful face[[,]]
S[[s]]o full of peace[[.]]
I could lay here for ever
T[[t]]o just watch you sleep[[.]]

Some say it's not out there[[,]]
T[[t]]rue love you can't find[[.]]
But[[,]] I see it before me
In a man gentle and kind[[.]]

So[[,]] hold me tonight[[.]]
Though I doubt I will sleep[[,]]
F[[f]]or when I am with you
I can't even breathe [[.]]

The poem overall was amazing. No spelling mistakes ora nything, the flow was great. I actually liked this quite a bit.

I'll give it a 4/5

Excellent!

it flowed out right!

keep it up!

OMG i luv it....its short and to the point. u did a gr8 job. Keep it up