Oh. Wow.
I love this. Absolutely magnificent.
You're flow was flawless, the wording was great [Although, honestly-- I had trouble understanding some parts. Lol.] , & it was unique. It wasn't cliche & I can't thank you enough for that. :)

"Though no sense has come from this,
with horrid english and horrid lisp..
I ask my soul to find the way
in the world of trouble gone astray."

^ Fabulous job. You ended the poem perfectly. :) 5.5 Keep writing.

--- Stephanie Lynn .+.

I agree with the above comment that you ended this poem perfectly! It was really well done, and welcome back to the site. It's a good piece with good flow and rhyme.
Nice job!
Charisma*

Excellent!

ok, to be honest im not that good at giving comments to others, im much of a reader, well exactly as you had say, i don't really get the picture but some lines were great and the ideas are well written..it expresses much emotions and this piece is powerful

Keep it up

It all went together very well, it made perfect sense if you looked at it the right way. Great job 5/5

It did go perfectly together...it was full of emotion and it was just perfect all together. it had a powerful message, i loved it...keep it up! you got a 5/5 coming from me!
Great Job!

Jenna