Paper full of final goodbyes

by Lisa   Sep 21, 2007


Dark room full of desolate cries
A wistful woman does sit
Paper full of final goodbyes

No one around to wipe tears from her eyes
Sickening feeling deep in her pit
Dark room full of desolate cries

Why does she yearn the love he denies
No will to go on, she must quit
Paper full of final goodbyes

Never a heartbreak she felt this size
Total destruction, not just a split
Dark room full of desolate cries

So many lows so many highs
She can only hold on for a little bit
Paper full of final goodbyes

Now like their love she lays and dies
Blood from her wrists that she had slit
Dark room full of desolate cries
Paper full of final goodbyes

*This poem is a Villanelle. It is the first one I have written. A villanelle consists of 19 lines, including five tercets and a quatrain at the end. Each tercet is made up of three lines. The rhyme scheme for each tercet is aba. (the first and last have the same end rhyme, which just means the last word in each line rhymes) The concluding quatrain consists of four lines. The rhyme scheme is abab. Now, this is where it gets tricky. Two lines are repeated throughout the entire poem. -The first line of the last stanza is repeated as the last line in the second and fourth stanzas and also as the second-to-last line of the ending quatrain. -The third line of the first stanza is repeated as the last line of the third and fifth stanza and as the last line in the ending quatrain.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    I didn't like this as well as the others, because the flow was off. but, I'm not a big fan of Villanelle's.

    The poem itself though, minus the flow was amazing. When you take it line by line it has intense meaning and the word choice is great.

    4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Sweet Fragility

    Great poem and the rhyme scheme is clever too. Keep writing.

    "Paper full of final goodbyes"

    I LOVED that line. ^^^^^^^^^^

  • 17 years ago

    by Veamm

    Good!

    Great ideas and concept

    keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    Love the way you repete the 2 lines in alternate at the end of each verse then bring them together at the end. awesome poem well done

    Love
    Jacs
    xxxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wonderful job! Keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

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