"I slip into my fantasy,
Now we're stood here face to face."

i love how you use those lines to jump right into the storyline, its a perfect transition...

"You hear me gently whimper"...is it weird that i cracked up? just had this picture of a dog...whimpering...haha, wont go any farther

but seirously, great work on this, keep up the good work!

That was short and sweet, real god 5/5 from me

This poem was very intresting. it kept my intrest through the whole poem. very well done