This one is very beautiful it brought a tear to my eye.

Amazing job, you have alot of talent. The repetition in this poem made it so much stronger and it flowed so well. And the imagery in away was very strong. Like I could actually picture that...it was a great piece of work!

That was really sad, i mean the poem. it was definitly one of my faves. when i close my eyes i can actually see the little girl
i can tell u speak ur mind and make poems flow so well. keep on wrighting!

This piece, the story behind it was quite sad to tell you the truth. The repetition of "Little girl, little girl" I didn't really like it just didn't seem to sound right to me but thats only my personal opinion. The other thing that through me off was all your stanzas have 4 lines except one which had 5 that reuined the flow in that spot.
Overall a 4/5. Not too bad. ~Mel