by kira2 Sep 22, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
When you come home from being gone |
by kira2
Thanks for your feedback, |
by Nix
It is very honest and I like the idea of this poem but you have some mistakes in it. You expressed emotions nicely but you can do that even better with some metaphors and deeper descriptions. It is interesting but it also could be better with stronger atmosphere. |
by hope
Thats heaps good i really liked it |