I think this is a well written piece, unique and strong. The flow was a bit rocky for me, but it was pleasure to read.

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Great poem.

This has to be the best one I've read so far. whike being relatively short you managed to put so much emotion in. i loved the ending to this..so powerful and filled with such intensity that it's like a slap in the face for the reader..beautiful.