Innocent mail

Awww it bought tears to my eyes!
It's such a sweet poem! :-)
Keep writing

5/5

Danielle
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WOW !
It's good.

Hey, watch your tone of voice, you are a great writer that's why I asked your advise. I will take your advise because I think your poetry is good and you are great. I don't care how you give your advise, I care from whom it comes. Many thanks, C U

I actually really enjoyed the contents of this poem. For a first one on the site, it's not half bad.

Just remember one thing with poetry - spelling and grammer count. Punctuation is also important, but some poets find a way of making a poem brilliant without using any. This is constructive critisism so please do not think anything bad of what I am saying. This is to help.

For example:

It started 3 years ago
With aN innocent mail.
You now owe me a kiss and
I cannot wait, you know.

Mails wERE sent forward
And back, the joke become
more seriously in fact. I kept on
INSisting on my request.

YOU invited me over
For a visit or so.
I hesitated at first
But finALly, I did go.

YOU looked so sexy,
And oh so friendly.
I was noT nervOUs,
But didn't show IT.

We ended up in
each other's armS.
I'M glad that kiss ended
up in a fantastic time.

Now I'm in love.
A love which I cannot explain.
I know it is forever.
I hope YOU feel the same.

Go back and read your poem and see what I have suggested you change. Look, I'm not a very good writer, but this is just a bit of advise. take it or leave it. Your choice :)

But I'm really glad to see you on here cuz!!!! Keep writing!!!!!

Josie