Melody of cursed

by firexdancer   Sep 23, 2007


The rippling of an old song's tune
spinning hauntingly in sound
the tempted hearts and twisted minds
all craving what they've found

the melody like hissing snakes
hypnotizing in their stare
entranced are all who listen
as they stop from what is fair

the grins and bloodthirsty screams
only a reflection of the truth
the twisting, turning sound of life
now like the sharpest tooth

stained with every lust and thought
as crimson petals fall
the rose burst open into blood
the darkest of them all

they turn their faces to it's thorns
ecstatic with every pain
for them, the wounds no longer hurt
they fall softly as if rain

the terror of the innocent
turned into mourning flames
the men kill their own families
oblivious of their shames

the games of war they carry out
like cursed children of the night
singing their horrific melody
no memory of what is right

and crimson petals fall from far
as well as leaves of white
symbols of the innocent
tormented by light

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  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is a very profound poem that seemingly was inspired
    I have no doubt that you are a great poet

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    The flow was really really good, I didn't have to pause at any time while I was reading this through. The rhymes didn't feel forced at all. It gave me such a chilling, horrific, fantastic feeling. You did an amazing job!

    stained with every lust and thought
    as crimson petals fall
    the rose burst open into blood
    the darkest of them all
    ^^Oooh, Love love looove that stanza, especially the third line. :]

    the terror of the innocent
    turned into mourning flames
    the men kill their own families
    oblivious of their shames
    ^^Wow, the men kill their families? Haha, that's an awsome line. So dark, so twisted, so wrong. Yet, I LOVE it.

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 16 years ago

    by Faithless Watermelon

    It had a good theme and you stuck to it, but the rhyme scheme was off - it should have been every other line rhyming instead of just 2nd and fourth.

  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    Very effective and deep poem, it holds many emotions and it is really original. You created excellent atmosphere in this one and whole poem has superb rhythm. Well done!

  • 17 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    The effect on this poem was errie and dark, I love how the description and the flow is never cliched.
    The rymthes are very good, aswell as the vocabulary.

    Keep it up,
    5/5

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