Greatly written poem with truly dark and somehow haunting atmosphere. I like the descriptions in the whole piece, very unique and captivating.
My favorite stanzas are:

-the melody like hissing snakes
hypnotizing in their stare
entranced are all who listen
as they stop from what is fair

the grins and bloodthirsty screams
only a reflection of the truth
the twisting, turning sound of life
now like the sharpest tooth

^Very dark and effective.
You also did good job with rhymes.
Keep writing!

The effect on this poem was errie and dark, I love how the description and the flow is never cliched.
The rymthes are very good, aswell as the vocabulary.

Keep it up,
5/5

Very effective and deep poem, it holds many emotions and it is really original. You created excellent atmosphere in this one and whole poem has superb rhythm. Well done!

It had a good theme and you stuck to it, but the rhyme scheme was off - it should have been every other line rhyming instead of just 2nd and fourth.

The flow was really really good, I didn't have to pause at any time while I was reading this through. The rhymes didn't feel forced at all. It gave me such a chilling, horrific, fantastic feeling. You did an amazing job!

stained with every lust and thought
as crimson petals fall
the rose burst open into blood
the darkest of them all
^^Oooh, Love love looove that stanza, especially the third line. :]

the terror of the innocent
turned into mourning flames
the men kill their own families
oblivious of their shames
^^Wow, the men kill their families? Haha, that's an awsome line. So dark, so twisted, so wrong. Yet, I LOVE it.

Keep writing!
Cayce

This is a very profound poem that seemingly was inspired
I have no doubt that you are a great poet