by George Sep 23, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Burning vision of his love, |
by MyEscape
VERY VERY GOOD! The only suggestion I have is to take out the word 'ever' in the second to last line. Other than that, it was breathtakingly beautiful with great wording. I'm enjoying your work a lot! |
by The Herald
Ditto on andrew, wtg man! check out my "dracula" lol, i think yours trumps mine ohhh lemme think 10:1 good enough? lol, DANG ITS GOOD! 11/10 |
by Veamm
Good! |
by Fixxxer
Man tah twas just beautiful. Your flow is incredible and feelings deep. definitely 5/5, keep up the good work. |
Its very difficult to work with a strict rhyming scheme, all too often people cram words in just to fit the flow, and you didnt need to do that even once, which is very hard to do, this is amazing work, keep it up |