I'll be honest... I wasnt a very big fan of this one. :/ The flow was a little sketchy and it threw me off.
"There's a six car pile up on the highway to my heart" blinding. It caught my entire right away, and everything about that verse was everything that I liked.
Lack of rhyme usually throws me off, and this time it has. Otherwise though.. It was an excellent concept and a good story. I just couldnt get into it. Sorry.

4/4

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Thank you for posting this poem, i honestly loved the start, it was inviting and very clever how you arranged the words...

keep writing tammie, well done. 5/5 David

Lovly! beautiful!

If you don't know in which category you should put this one maybe you should put it in misc. poems?
That is just my suggestion, flow was little off in some parts. Ending is very powerful. All in all this poem is excellent and I enjoyed in it, just this stanza leaves awful impression to me:
-Denial has never felt this good,
But this feeling isn't going to last.
Like life, lies have their endings too
Killing someone on the inside every time.-
^That last line also simply doesn't fit.

That is just my opinion and I don't want to offend you, I just think that this poem needs some changing and correcting. Still, I like the way that you described your emotions, it is really unique and it creates powerful atmosphere.

This one is one of the best freeverse poems I have read and come across. Its just in the right category coz it depicts clear mournful feelings and the reason why your words are crying tears.

Very poetic and lexically strong :)
Tc
Fsams

"There's a six car pile up on the highway to my heart" holy ****! i friggin adore that line...favourite part of the whole piece. but what really got me was the fact it was free verse and yet the flow was FLAWLESS throughout...now i'm not much of a fan of free verse but you pulled this of wonderfully...i was hooked throughout. beautiful ending..so much feeling and power. beautifully written.

It's never a good thing when you feel like people are just fooling around with you.
I like the way you've described how you feel about that in this piece, i also liked the ending.

Good poem.

angelique

Good!

For this one, i can see such efforts and ideas on it.I don't see much rhyming ends but its okay. But I like the entire topic.

I like your beginning line.

"I'll be your escape route if you'll be my happiness"

it was too emotional and thats great!

Keep on writing!

Beautiful. You had so many amazing lines through it. Very Powerful ending, and specialy liked that it didn't ryhme, it gives writer a change to say more(on my opinion). Emotions were very strong.
Really amazing piece!
5/5 Keep up!