Well written n different to the others iv'e read of yours not got through them all yet not had time but i will, ur a great poet keep up the good work.....5.5 :O)

Another great poem (-:

Wow...amazing poem..i truelly love it...its very deep and well written...great job..~*~CINDY~*~

Wow.. this one.. just. . WOOOOSH... swept me off my feet .. an awesome piece !

"..You're dodging my touch,
Turn your head from my kiss.
I'm feeling so much,
When you're feeling like this.."

you truly have superbly expressed it.. wordings and emotions used perfectly with each other.. very relatable and a Damn Amazing write.
Loved it
Keep it coming

~Wake~

WOW! This was a great piece. for being new to poetry, you're amazing! I love the structure of the rhyme in this poem! Amazing. I have a suggestion on the flow, though. "Yet your smile's getting faded," in that line I would take out the word 'getting'. I don't think it's gramatically correct and it throws the flow off. There were like two other lines where the wording could be changed slightly to have a better flow, but I thought that was the major of the three. Nice job though...a great piece with a sad ending!
Charisma*

OMG that was one of the best poems i have hurd in a while very good job and i like how it rimes to i love it
love kasia

Oh holy ****
I frikken loved this...so much raw emotion and depth throughout the whole piece...beautiful ending, it was the perfect way to wrap up this heartfelt piece...beautifully written.

Hey Pete,

well all I can say is wow...thats talent...really deep poem, loved it.

Great poem I love it!

I really LOVE this poem, the flow of it was beautiful and the words used was very good! keep up the wonderful work. 5/5 from me hun,

MickeysBabyGurl

Oh, I loved the way it ended. It was a nice twist to what seemed, at first, to be a very sweet love poem. I love this stanza,
"Yet your smile's faded,
You don't seem the same.
Your features are jaded,
Your feelings have changed?"
You rhyme so well while keeping to the point, they never seem forced, I'm jealous. Rhyming is something I struggle with in my poetry, it always seems off to me. That's just between you and me though lol. Another 5.5

marcella