Pale Matter

I love this, as sometimes poetry can just be writen for the sake of it, which you have acknowleged here. I love these lines, they'd have to be my favourite;
"just a frantic impulsion
to write something colorful
perhaps, something as pretty as grass"

You used good vocab, rhyme and had a smooth flow. A well penned poem, I enjoyed reading. 5/5

Tammie

So filled with emotions and thoughts. I like this poem. If improved, would be great. Keep it up.

You are seriously talented. this was amazing to read.
maybe you could read some of my poems and tell me what you think =]

*johnsongurl

That was deep, and very good. i hope u keep writing more, so that i can read!

~DOA aka keiki aiko~

Great use of metaphors.... the flow was perfect and the message superb, I think many can relate to this write. Excellent!!