I like the pony of madness part. man for the first part it was like you were using yourself as a human punching bag

your servant:
atticus

Oh, wow... I can deeply relate to this one.
You wrote this piece excellently, it has so powerful descriptions and brilliant metaphors.
My favorite stanza is:

-but I'm riding my pony of madness, anyway
through barbed wire
and hot stone
or wherever her language may be,
after all she does exist inside of me-

Truly effective piece, well done!
Keep up!

WONDERFULLY MAGNIFICENT AND A JOY TO READ

This was truly a treat to read. I love the images and metaphors, and anyone who writes can certainly relate to the sentiments you've expressed so cleverly. There are so many great lines contained in this piece- I was going to mention my favorites, but I love the whole poem! I especially liked the opening and ending stanzas and absolutely love this part-
'just a frantic impulsion
to write something colorful
perhaps, something as pretty as grass'.
But as I said the whole poem fits together and flows wonderfully. Great poem!

Peace, poetry & Power,

Gary Jurechka

Great job!
i enjoyed this alot.
5/5

Great use of metaphors.... the flow was perfect and the message superb, I think many can relate to this write. Excellent!!

That was deep, and very good. i hope u keep writing more, so that i can read!

~DOA aka keiki aiko~

You are seriously talented. this was amazing to read.
maybe you could read some of my poems and tell me what you think =]

*johnsongurl

So filled with emotions and thoughts. I like this poem. If improved, would be great. Keep it up.

I love this, as sometimes poetry can just be writen for the sake of it, which you have acknowleged here. I love these lines, they'd have to be my favourite;
"just a frantic impulsion
to write something colorful
perhaps, something as pretty as grass"

You used good vocab, rhyme and had a smooth flow. A well penned poem, I enjoyed reading. 5/5

Tammie