Such a sad story being told. Greiving, pain, loss, and by the sounds of it frustration. I want to say lovely poem, but its too dark for the word lovely .. so i'll call it beautifully written instead.
Nice work.
5/5

I agree it is beautifully written and certainly encompasses a lot of emotions. I would however disagree that it is too dark to be termed lovely as you use such soft words to convey such raw emotion.
Lovely piece:)

Ooo. I <3 you right now.
I just finished reading Impulse a couple weeks ago. I think it was an amazinggg book. :P

Back to the poem:
It was great, really. The flow was flawless, the emotions were strong, & the word usage was great. Fantastic job! :) Overall: 5.5

--- Stephanie Lynn .+.

Maybe i should read that book it would give me some ideas. you think that i would need any helpfull ideas since we bothread each others poems? ah well anyway ou needs to be you but that is baout it nice poem:~)Sam

Beautiful piece!

A truly immaculate poem! The way it was written, the flow, the word choice, and the concept were all flawless! I really loved it! 5/5