Hey ppl please write a comment about this one[&&] this is about my god bro who was killed in a car explosion coz his sister told there dad not to liite a smoke coz she could smell gas so the cok..head did arghhhhhhh

love ya all xx

Hey, i think this is a really good attempt of a good poem. However your first two lines are a bit weird i think.

He passed away coz of someone dumb
Who thought he would be a smarty bum

How about....

He passed away, he lost his heart,
Because of someone thinking they were smart.

I think that something like that would have made this poem perfect :D xxx alex xxx

Hey hey alex thx for the tip..ill be sure to get some good tips off yu on my next poem

Very sweet i wish i could say that to my dad, i wrote a poem to him to

Sorry about that i left a comment for the wrong person but this poem was good