This one is pretty good.. you have some potential i think! just keep it up! i love how you explained the feelings this person felt... wonderful!

I loves it, If you were to wor on it abit more it would be a masterpeice! Lol, thats what my art teacher always says, "No art work is ever done, or completed...Something can always be changed, added or removed...It is never really done"

Haha i like that comment martine made haha awsome i love it and also i love this poem its great