A Lover's Sonnet [acrostic sonnet]

by Ashes of a Black Rose aka Night Child   Sep 26, 2007


[K]arma begins walking down dark her path,
[I]ntoxication will soon be deciaved.
[R]eason will triumph and win its last match,
[A]nd as I leave you, Im surely relieved.
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[C]ourtship renders not a thing that is new,
[O]lder yes, but just once Ill ask you why.
[D]enial questions, and somehow seems true,
[Y]et every said word seems to say "we defy."
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[D]etecting each little black love-laced lie,
[A]ll things but the genuine or sincere,
[N]othing but truth displayed in the blue eyes,
[I]ntentions were lustful and oh so clear.
[E]clipse of the heart leads us to deny,
[L]ittle deceives lust to which we comply.

it was hard to write the sonnet as acrostic, so PLEASE let me know if it worked out alright! thanks so much!

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  • 17 years ago

    by Blacksand

    Very well written. I have never wrote and acrostic poem but you have done a few of them really well.

    [E]clipse of the heart leads us to deny,
    [L]ittle deceives lust to which we comply.

    I LOVE these two lines. Its amazing how often lust blinds the heart. You have done very good with an extreamly hard form. 5/5 Good job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie

    O_o.
    I love this. :)
    A very creative write, that I'm sure was very hard to master.. I know I couldn't have done it. ;P

    "[D]etecting each little black love-laced lie,
    [A]ll things but the genuine or sincere,"

    ^^
    Those lines were beautifully written. I'm envious. :) Magnificent job. Overall: 5.5

    --- Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 17 years ago

    by KaKaSHi

    Wow!
    well..first of..i think its a very sweet acrostic poem...considering u had ur friend's names i think..
    i wrote an acrostic...but not like that....i really like it..=]

    one thing though...2nd line first stanza...u have a spelling mistake...(deceived)...
    i think thats wat u meant..
    oh and try to refrain from using commas and dots at the end of each line....kinda breaks the flow..
    but all in all..its amazing...a definite 5/5 from me..=D

  • 17 years ago

    by Pete

    I think this is really beautifully penned. You did extremely well with a very hard structure. I'm not the best person to comment on the structure of it - but i can truly tell you its a really nice read.
    2nd line, last word - i don't know that word i can only presume you mean Deceived?
    Great flow, wonderful emotion.
    A defo 5/5 for me.

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