Wow, wow... Amazing poem, excellently written, very metaphorical and complex. I just love everything about it: The topic, your message and the wording that creates unique and great atmosphere.
My favorite stanza is:

-"Ring around the rosy, pocket full of <shit>",
And they said speaking my mind was a bad thing
When you're full of cookies and that oh so tasty wit;
(Ashes, ashes, we all fall...)-
^
Truly effective, powerful!
Whole concept is great and the repetition made quite interesting flow.
Well done, 5/5 from me

<shit> is a bad word.

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I think the mnost upfront thing that shines through this poem is the way the language is layed out to help your reader plus entertain them at the same time. it is a real thought provoking poem :D xxx alex xxx

Man, you sure know how to cut a person down, overall good poem, you almost lost me in the middle but have no fear i stayed on

your servant:
atticus

DSGLKASJDG.
Sheena, this is probably the best poem I've read today.
I love it, like 100%. (:

Keep up the GREAT work, darling.

I didn't enjoy this poem quite as much as the others. It's definitely a good idea but it just seems like there's a bit too much wrapped up in one poem. My mind's going too many directions at once.

As always, though, I enjoyed the imagery and the vivid descriptions that seem to be so common throughout your poetry.