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by Simple Sensation Sep 28, 2007 category : Dark, fantasy / other
Engulfed visualisations, Leading to burning desires; As visions of the future Become scarcely seen. Blurred. Trapped in deep frozen fire, Burning towards the unseen; The unknown enters thoughts It's all scarcely seen. Blurred. Visions have been uprooted, Away from the soft ground; The flames continuously burn It seems scarcely seen. Blurred. My visions are in flames, Burning throughout the night; They twist - they turn Seemingly out of sight. They are scarcely seen. Blurred. Simple Sensation 28 September 2007 *This is a new style of writing for me, constructive criticism is appreciated!*
by DeathlyAmore
O0o0o! I have done this before. 8D I love the fact you used repetition in the poem with 'blurred'. "Blurred. My visions are in flames, Burning throughout the night; They twist - they turn Seemingly out of sight. They are scarcely seen. Blurred. " ^^ I love that part. It stuck out in my head above the rest of the poem. Again, I loved the repetition, your title matched your poem, your poem had correct grammar and punctuation from what I see. I LOVE IT. I voted 5/5 -Sam