Visions In Flames

by Simple Sensation   Sep 28, 2007


Engulfed visualisations,
Leading to burning desires;
As visions of the future
Become scarcely seen.

Blurred.

Trapped in deep frozen fire,
Burning towards the unseen;
The unknown enters thoughts
It's all scarcely seen.

Blurred.

Visions have been uprooted,
Away from the soft ground;
The flames continuously burn
It seems scarcely seen.

Blurred.

My visions are in flames,
Burning throughout the night;
They twist - they turn
Seemingly out of sight.

They are scarcely seen. Blurred.

Simple Sensation
28 September 2007

*This is a new style of writing for me, constructive criticism is appreciated!*

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  • 17 years ago

    by DeathlyAmore

    O0o0o! I have done this before. 8D

    I love the fact you used repetition in the poem with 'blurred'.

    "Blurred.

    My visions are in flames,
    Burning throughout the night;
    They twist - they turn
    Seemingly out of sight.

    They are scarcely seen. Blurred. "

    ^^ I love that part. It stuck out in my head above the rest of the poem.

    Again, I loved the repetition, your title matched your poem, your poem had correct grammar and punctuation from what I see.

    I LOVE IT.

    I voted 5/5

    -Sam