Mermaids

by Choose xX Alex Xx Life   Sep 30, 2007


Masterminds of anguish,
Beauties of the sea.
Using this as a weapon,
Their delight as a shield.

Beneath the smiles
and dolphin like voices,
They leave others with little
if at all any choices,

Of whether they want
to be extinct,
Or stay in the command
of these things.

Tails wave through the ocean,
bringing fear,
For the the rest of them know,
They are near.

To steal their lives,
play with their souls
These are the beauties,
With secrets untold.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Robert

    This was better but it still lacked some fundemental mythology that you could have used. I would doi some research on Mermaids and then redo this poem but it was good for starters. Plot1211

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    This is an excellent piece
    5.5
    i love your descriptive language. It is very strong in this particular poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Nikko McMorbid

    So filled with emotions and thoughts. I like this poem. If improved, would be great. Keep it up.

  • 17 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    I like how you gave something seen as relatively peaceful an evil persona, never thought of mermaids like that..great word choice in this one, keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by shawn hoskins

    This was very good just like the rest of your poems your very talented

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