Your vocabulary was wide and you worded everything so well, which i liked alot.

The flow wasn't perfect and i had to read some parts twice, but overall it flowed well enough to make sense.

I liked the style, some of it rhymed others not so well but in this poem that actually worked.

You did an overall good job, it's not the best i have read, but i grant you the talent.

Love always,
Tara-Kayx

Wow, I am impressed. This poem is powerful, wording is excellent and you created incredible atmosphere. Very emotional and you really wrote this poem beautifully. Well done!

A brilliant piece of work. I really love the way the language flowed. I love the image you gave of and the power of your heart really nice write. xxx alex xxx

Good but the vocabulary is kind of over done a little bit if you tone that down a bit it would be better i think but nice poem 4/5

Tis a very good poem, i love the broad vocabulary you used in this one, love it, i give it a 5/5!!!

Okay, sorry that took so long. My computer has been getting really testy... Anyways, Phor my phirst comment I would just like to say that so phar your writing is excellent. I love the words you used, and when you used them. I do wonder iph you meant phor them to rhyme as much as they did (particularly in the phirst two lines, and the last stanza) or iph that was just accidental; however, I love that it held it's rhythm with it. I enjoyed the repetition ov the phirst line ov the phirst stanza, and the phirst line ov the last stanza.

I was going to ask about the 'minty wind' you rephered too though. I can't decide whether I liked it or I didn't. On one hand, it's a repherence I haven't heard bephore - and it makes me think ov a sharp wind. Puts taste into something I should only see. I like the added texture ov it, but at the same time part ov me needs to get used to that. What inspired you to mix such things?
Well umm, my computer isa cting up again, so this might be all I can give phor this poem...But I will be back to give you two more sooner rather than later... You really are an excellent writer though! I can't believe this is what spills phrom your pen. Well done.

Wow the word choices in this astound me. I just loved it. Every single line that I read was just amazing and when I thought it couldn’t get any better I continued reading it and it surpassed my expectations. the message was so strong. I couldn’t help but agree to it. Wonderful job, and beautiful title by the way.