Interesting poem. Very original and i love it! Great job.

fav part: Smoking kills she says
as she lights one up,

I like your work but I don't feel like it's so good. Try to improve. Read some guides and try to think twice, no, think twenty times before submiting a poem.

Wow that is really awesome. keep u p the good work

Dont listan to zisto you can write what ever you want to right about it. if it sounds good to you then let everybody know dont let people tell you what to do. i thought the poem what really great keep up the good work and belive in your self no matter what people say