Very powerful poem, it is so emotional and you expressed sadness, and feelings greatly. Topic is sadly very true.
I have one suggestion(that down is just my opinion):
1. Maybe you should change this
You wrote in the third stanza:
-Each day- and in last stanza you have (in fourth stanza too) -each crystal- that isn't effective, it leaves bad impression to me.
Anyway superb piece, it really has very touching rhythm. Well done!

The rhyming scheme is just a little bit off. [surrounds-found | swansong-belong]
Also, from the contest point of view, I didn't really see the connection between the title and the poem's content.
The good parts of it are the fact that you use vivid imagery and the poem keeps you interested through the end.
All in all, it's a good poem.
5/5

I think this is one of the best poem's I've ever read. Honestly. It's short, but tells a beautiful, yet very sad story of a young girl. Your rhyming, flow, form, and vocab are all absolutely flawless. For this, you are going on my favourites. You have an amazing talent. 5/5

Tammie :]

Wow i love poems like this!
Loved the imagery, the true beauty of death how sad it is.
My favourite lines:

"Gravestone adorned with flowers, a snow trampled path that surrounds
A place where she is forever lost and never will be found."

''Yet with each crystal of frost that is falling, another story is told.''

''All crystals represent another life that is torn away
Sadly proving to the world that nothing gold can stay.''

This is so beautifully expressed.
Awesome write :)

5/5

xo angelique

Beautiful. I love the way the poem flows, it reads really well. some wonderful imagery as well, i really like your style.
DnB

Wow, i really love this poem. It's wonderful. ur a very powerful writer. I hope you keep writing more poems...

A very nice song. The expression was very good in this poem. The rhyming and structure fit the story line. 5/5

Wow, this is a really great poem. It's true that nothing stays gold. It's really good. 5/5

<mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

Wow... I truly enjoyed in this effective piece. It is excellently written from the beginning to the end, and it holds huge amounts of sadness and beauty. You created very vivid and captivating imagery through the piece.
My favorite lines are:

-We desire Utopia, where death only strikes those who are old
Yet with each crystal of frost that is falling, another story is told.-

You have great talent!

I like this poem, well written, but it's quite abstract which I like, it get's you to use your noodle. I'm trying to understand the title and how it relates to the poem itself. My guess is that the content refers to abortion who are the angels and innocent.