.... whoa! wow! what else can i say? your range of vocab and imagery was uncanny. it was another great poem by tammie

nice job, i love reading your poems. back to read some more.

5/5 David

Very deep poem, it has effective rhythm and topic is great. Imagery is good, you expressed emotions on a excellent way. I truly enjoyed in this one, powerful atmosphere is mixed with very meaningful tone. Well done!

You switched rhyme patterns. It threw me off. And i didnt like how choppy the lines were. ><
What I did like though.. Is the image, the moral, and the vocabulary. All of this cancells out what I said above.
The moral especially is great. It shouts, "Pay attention to those who need it." Kind of like how we talked about that last night.
Or have faith in the ones that people never see.

Nice to see you writing again, love.

5/5

First off I wan to say sorry I havn't commented on alot of your poems in awhile just been busy you know how it is. Well this ws quite different from you usual I must say. I really love it thogh expecially your word usage they were quite deep and powerful which portrayed a great effect over me while reading. A sadly written poem and i'm glad to see you writing again. 5/5 ~Mel

Wow wow & wow...
i loved it, very true , so expressful, powerful & deep..
u'r very talented, honestly. =)

My , my.. what a tremendously heartbreaking write.. very dark, no doubt . .and had an AWESOME flow to it.. AMAZING
loved how you created the feeling in the reader..

"..Used, refused and
Chemically abused.
Self-mutilation
Mixed with
Intoxication.."

Great piece

~Wake~

Terrific poem.
i always pick the right times to chose to review some of ur work.
i come back and read something that shows me how much you've grown, and how great ur work is.

the rhyming was near flawless.
the ending was superb.
5/5 easy.

~sore