by yelitza
That was good |
by Jen
Iliked it. |
Keep an eye on format, that is one of the key ingredients to a good poem |
Yeah typ eout your words itll be alot easier to read |
by Helen
Being honest i felt there were some words missing out if you know what i mean... |
Are u trying to make it rhyme? but the storyline is nice just i dunno maybe the wrong choice of words perhaps |
by Estefania
I really liked it 5/5 |
by Brittney
Keep writing and you will get better. |
by Boy
It was nice. but i think youshould have written more. its short. great work 5/5 |
by Hazel
Hi... |
It doesn't feel complete to me, but it is a start..i like the theme of the four seasons being used to describe the relationship and I think you can continue to develop that it will turn out good..the flow is ok and there were some lines that were a bit awkward like the ending..but to me it doesnt have an ending because i think it could go on...but a good start, keep it up... |
by Aish
Hi, |
This poem is well thought out in abstract form but the rhythm and rhyme is missing whish makes it hard to follow. |
by TotaMariee
To improve you should make it flow a little better, the poem dident really flow well, and the rhyming wasent that great to tell the truth,but i like the whole setting of the poem :) |
by Mack Bopape
Not that much understandeble if you read it once, it is a nice piece, even though you have to read it once to understand. |
by diana
Try to just say what's on your mind... even if it doesn't rhyme... who knows maybe you'll come up with something better... but your poem is nice :) |
by Kayla
Its really good. Kinda of short...maybe if u add a lil more to it! |
by Melissa
To be honest you could have written more for it and maybe used a few different words? |
by IfYouWantMe
I read some of your other comments. I like the poem, but it is lacking something. I am not the one to criticize, my poems are far from great. I like the message, just work on getting that across. Add more. But not too much. With time you will get the hang of things. But always stay true to yourself. Write how you like...if it makes sense to you...leave it the way it is...Remember it is your poem...it's about what u feel not what I feel. Keep writing!!! |
by Helen
I have to admite this time i read it, it was very much improved :) |