Ohh.. so sad!!! i like the way it flows though.. and i kept me reading.. wanting more!!! i love it!! keep it up!

Wow. it was graet poem . i loved it. you are a good writer.

It's really sad, but good. Is it something you've 'experianced' or something from your mind?

Wow. Very well written, I could feel the emotion in this through your imagery and wording. Without strong imagery and wording, it would have been hard to follow I think, but it wasn`t, so great job on that.

5.5
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This poem is beautiful, in such a sad,moving way
you have incredible talent, it must be said :)
5/5
take care, sarah x.o.x

I love the part about addiction because most of teens turn to it....i don't know I can really feel from it
5/5

The flow was very well done.
Emotion, depth.. both very good.
A nice job on this one.
Overall Rating: 4.6/5

Great poem
you wrote this well
i like the story to it
well good job
hope to read more sometime
and thx for the comment
Keenan

I feel sad after read this poem. Great work!

Awww, such a deep poem I loved the third stanza the most I would have to say..No idea why =S somthing about it just caught my attention Lol!! xxxx Keep up the great writing xxx Love Roxeh

This touched my heart ,it was sad yet so beauifully done and I can relate to how you must be feeling.Very well done.

I don't like rhyming too much, it seems forced and I think that this poem could be even better if you didn't rhyme in any stanza.
Other than that excellently done, second stanza is my favorite one and whole poem is written with a lot passion and greatly described sadness and strong emotions. You did good job, bravo!

"My breathing slows, I almost can't hear
Blurry eyes, trying to see past the tears
Heart stopping, my face showing my fears
Life lost at this last year."

I liked how you ended ur poem... it's really depressing and touching at the same time... your story is quite sad like mine... the way you've written it really struck me.. anywayz.. great poem! =]

I loved it. The emotion was shown.
Your a talented writer.

"I'm slowly sinking in the quicksand
Drowning fast in the bath
Burning up in consent fire
Not having you anymore, is nothing I want."

My favourite stanza.
Keep writing, 5/5

Addict is two ds, but that's okay, you have shown your powerful command of language, again, and again
ever try non-rhyming poems?

I love this poem , the only one to have expressed all I've been feeling for the past few months