by Independence Forever Oct 2, 2007
category :
Special events /
other poems
A veritable cauldron of didn't identities |
I liked the idea of this poem and I really liked the middle. The beginning and the end however are a different story. I think that the first line is supposed to say different identities instead of didn't identities but I could be wrong. And the very last line throws off the poem. Less mild? that doesnt make much sence. I understand that you had to rhyme it but I think that a different line structure might have been a better choice. Very well done on the middle, and my favorite couplet had to be the 2nd last one. Its so true halloween night children always indulge themselves and make themselves sick, its part of the passage in life. 3/5 |
by Teria
Goodness Gracious. |