Again another exellent poem, i believe that thispoem comes from within this make the poem unique and plausable loved it xxx alex xxx

I wish I could write as well as you! T_T

Very cold and foreboding, but an awesome write, well done

your servant:
atticus

Wow.
It's different, very different. I don't think I've ever seen a poem set up this way. Well, I have a few times, but they didn't capture me. Lol. They were almost like stories, and that's it. This though, this is amazing, my dear. Seriously amazing.

Keep up the great workkk. (:

I don't like the first stanza much, but I think it improves dramatically throughout.

Seems mystical and definite. That probably doesn't make sense. The mystical part comes from the fact that the narrator of the poem seems somewhat dazed and confused. At the same time, though, they seem definite and as if they knew exactly what was happening. My favorite line was "They told me it was cold where I was, so I asked them why I hadn't set myself on fire. " Nice.

I do remember the cold; I shuttered the chill away, but as soon as I stopped moving the particles slowed almost to a halt and stuck to my skin, invisible.

The first part, "I do remember" reminds me of the bit in my profile. Why am I talking about reminders so much? I dont know or care. xD I wasnt as big of a fan of this as I am for your others.. but you did a good job all the same. A very good job. Your imagery is getting really strong and it's almost like a small story throughout my head.

Good job, Sheena.

I loved how this guy in all the moments of the poem almost made the reader think the person in the poem was dieing very well done and dark good job Plot121

Wow this is a very obscure poem.. I liked the way that you wrote it.. almost like paragraph form, I don't normally think that this style works but you made it unique. I also liked how you made it very vague so that the reader can interpurate whatever they want out of this poem weather that was your intention or not. To me it reminds me of a person being left alone in their own madness. Nice work. As for corrections I looked throught this poem and I couldn't find any that need fixing.