Loved it! I love stuff through the eyes of a child and what it was like when we used to use OUR imaginations. It's nice to revisit that place through poetry and you did a nice job of that. Good job! 5/5
Charisma*

Complicated but is very good, i love the way you can bring such poetry to story form, your imagination is so vivid, the flow is perfect, another 5/5 babe!!!

I love this. The concept is original and you told your story so well. Great descriptions, creating detailed imagery. I could imagine the whole scene as I read it. Your rhyming is perfect, along with the flow. You wrapped it all up with a strong ending.
A very enjoyable read. 5/5

Tammie