I really like this piece it speeks alot its not an ordanary poem but i like it alot

"I am just a single white dot
And my heart and soul scream.
I shout at all the beautiful colors
But no one seems to see me."

^^What a beautiful opening, so much depth and power, and it pulls the reader right into the poem.

"Despair hits me between the eyes.
In the middle, I am here to rot.
I am nothing more than just me.
Simply: a single tiny white dot."

^^How I loved that stanza, such beautiful imagery and so much melancholy and despair placed in those four lines.

""I'm sorry, I can't be more."
The White falls into the black."

^^Now those lines made for a BEAUTIFUL ending, so much intensity.

On the whole, I think you did a fantastic job with this, the idea was original and unique, the imagery beautifully portrayed and the flow was good throughout.

The only thing I didn't like was the many "I's" in the piece.

But apart from that, this was perfect.

I L>O>V>E> this poem it lets me realize that there are more people out there who feel the same way that i do
great job
5
:~)Sam Mayo

Okay, PERFECT last line but the entire rest of the poem really could have been stronger. I don't know how to give you good critique. I guess I can say it seems very beginner. Make sure you don't repeat yourself too much. Um, find synonyms. Expand your vocabulary. This could be an AMAZINGLY stong and vibrant peice...but with a little elbow grease.

Being a white dot is never really all that bad, unless the background your put up against is also white. then you become invisible to all that matters, the other colours outshine you, but the same thing can happen to any "dot" of any color - it all just depends on the background. Excellent work as always 5/5 GG23

Question could i ues this poem for a class poetry project?
please and thank you
(~:Sam Mayo:~)

The way that you relayed conformity in this poem is refreshing. You gave it a form and stayed constant throughout the poem. Good job

I'm in love with you, stupid white dot.

Astounding work