Aaaaah. great jo you have put here. i will give you 5/5

The word choice was absoultley brillant, vocab well chosen, the imagery was vivd painted a clear picture in my mind, the message was clear, and tactfuilly written, well done on an intresting write, 5/5

Wooh!! pare what is about again?? ang hirap intindihin hehe.. honestly, it was a perfect picture of a person suffering from confusion and pain. and i like how u end it up.. smooth ending..

Absolutely great... Deep but interesting. 5/5

Much emotion in this piece, and I really enjoyed how you penned it. The vocab describes how you were feeling so well, allowing the reader to capture every thought at that point in time. Excellent write. 5/5

Tammie

It was an awesome piece. the mind can
become over loaded and alot of people
can relate to this. nice piece. 5/5

nikki

This was great and so deep. I could feel the emotion throughout it all. The flow was kinda shaky but it words you used were strong.

fave line -- so powerful
"Sip my own tears and cry blood"

well done *5/5*

Very powerful! You displayed very deep depression with this poem, and it really crawls into readers soul. Amazing. Your wording is just perfect!
Flawless!
5/5 Keep up

It was really good.
I loved it, short but sweet.

Keep it up.
xoxo
--CHelsey

Very powerful and effective, with good words usage. You expressed emotions greatly, created flawless flow in the whole piece.
I can relate to some parts of this poem.
My favorite stanza is:

-I wanted to disperse my feelings
to break loose from this chains
Sip my own tears and cry blood
to erase and throw away my pains-

Great job on this piece.
5/5 from me