I Give Up

This is really good, i think the flow really works, and i like your use of language, it portrays the story extremely well.
Well Done,
DnB

Such a sad poem. I can see myself in this poem. It's awful what you went through. You described everything so simple but yet so meaningful. Amazing poem.

Beautiful opening..really pulls on the reader's heart strings. i was thrown of at the end due to the fact beautiful and control don't really rhyme yet the rest of the poem did. a very moving and heartfelt write.

Hey such a sad poem,so simple but yet with strong meanings. i can feel what u've been through, i've been in ur position & still i am.
well done. :)