Hey such a sad poem,so simple but yet with strong meanings. i can feel what u've been through, i've been in ur position & still i am.
well done. :)

Beautiful opening..really pulls on the reader's heart strings. i was thrown of at the end due to the fact beautiful and control don't really rhyme yet the rest of the poem did. a very moving and heartfelt write.

Such a sad poem. I can see myself in this poem. It's awful what you went through. You described everything so simple but yet so meaningful. Amazing poem.

This is really good, i think the flow really works, and i like your use of language, it portrays the story extremely well.
Well Done,
DnB