by Beautiful Chaos Oct 6, 2007
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
Traipsing through this hourglass, |
I really loved the idea behind this poem and the way you phrased it, it was very thought-provoking. The only constructive input I have would be perhaps to make sure to proof-read your work because some phrases were odd such as "have you said the things wish" in the second stanza. Other than that, excellent job! |
by cory
That last line was awesome it hit me like a brick.And the rest of its great too.I love your poems keep writing!!= )5/5 |